Here I go
You asked to check your stuff, here it is:
00:00 - 00:28
Argh, it's horribly out of tune, it almost makes me want to alt+f4, but I hope it's only the intro. No offensive; but this really sounds crap (in my ears)
00:29 - 1:08
Okay, so finally your chords start playing some good tunes, and when the beat/percussion/bass comes in it actually sounds quite nice.
Maybe EQ the hihats a little bit, cuz they sound really sharp and high pitched.
The kick's got a good punch to it and the bass sounds nice, although it's a generic offbeat bass you here all the time.
1:09 - 1:37
A nice high square sound comes in (the melody?). Got nothing to say about it, it's pretty darn nice :)
1:37 - 1:50
Where did that sound go to? :O
Way to short to just leave it out like that. It just made the track feel better and then it somehow stops... bah
1:51 -2:19
Oh shit, those out-of-tunes filtered chords again.. it really doesnt suit the track.
2:20 - 2:48
Yay, the melody pops back in :) nice.
Again, I think it's a little bit to short
2:49 - 3:17
Basic outro from here, yay
Overall it has a good sound.
To bad you put those chords in at the beginning and halfway; it ruines it :(
4/5 and 8/10